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Y'all stop giving me motivation 
. Ok..I made one randomly lol ; 
THE ONES TO EXTINGUISH :
Eyes they don't trust
Eyes that they used to hate.
The one they left outcast
The one to efface.
After a long while, I'm back with a new poem! I wrote it for a school assignment; it had to have a fixed meter and rhyme scheme, so I decided on half iambic hexameter and half iambic pentameter with a scheme of aabb ccdd 
So Long
You walked a peaceful path until you turned around
And realized that what you had could not be found;
You cried, for you weren't ready for the pain
You always thought you had the world to gain.
The taste is ever sweeter when the source runs dry
Now when you look upon your past, you only sigh
And long for what is now beyond your grasp--
So, care for what you cherish while it lasts.
The only thing I'm not happy with is the successive "now"s in the second stanza, but I couldn't figure out how to work around them 
A nice rhyming scheme poem makes my day happy and I get satisfied
" half iambic hexameter and half iambic pentameter " Looks like you also came back with new words
..whats that 
??
Thank you so, an iamb is a couplet of one unaccented syllable and one accented syllable. The meter just indicates how many iambs are in a verse 
the first two lines in each stanza are hexameter, and the last two are pentameter
I've only ever done AABB in iambic tetrameter. I just have a really hard time counting stress on syllables...
Hourglass
Forever flow its sands of gold
It weaves a thread—a silent oath
For all it sees is crystal clear
No end in sight—it knows no fear.
A mirrored shine of distant past
A line of sand—its shadows cast
It carries on as we grow old
Through ages past, and times untold.
Accidently wrote a slant rhyme (gold/oath) 
I'd love to give "western" style Japanese poetry a try at some point. I really like 中原中也's style. Don't think my Japanese is good enough for that yet though 
On the other hand I find Haiku very easy to write.
Did something once write a poem about the Kao eating club 
I can't remember anymore
I've only ever done AABB in iambic tetrameter. I just have a really hard time counting stress on syllables...
Hourglass
Forever flow its sands of gold
It weaves a thread—a silent oath
For all it sees is crystal clear
No end in sight—it knows no fear.
A mirrored shine of distant past
A line of sand—its shadows cast
It carries on as we grow old
Through ages past, and times untold.
Accidently wrote a slant rhyme (gold/oath)
I'd love to give "western" style Japanese poetry a try at some point. I really like 中原中也's style. Don't think my Japanese is good enough for that yet though On the other hand I find Haiku very easy to write.
How did you get the hang of it so quickly bud?
I cud not.
(did you use chatgpt for the poem)
I've only ever done AABB in iambic tetrameter. I just have a really hard time counting stress on syllables...
Hourglass
Forever flow its sands of gold
It weaves a thread—a silent oath
For all it sees is crystal clear
No end in sight—it knows no fear.
A mirrored shine of distant past
A line of sand—its shadows cast
It carries on as we grow old
Through ages past, and times untold.
Accidently wrote a slant rhyme (gold/oath)
I'd love to give "western" style Japanese poetry a try at some point. I really like 中原中也's style. Don't think my Japanese is good enough for that yet though On the other hand I find Haiku very easy to write.
I cud not. (did you use chatgpt for the poem)
Maybe they wrote it a while ago?
Yeah, I wrote that one 2 months ago :D
I did my best to make sure the meter is correct. Pretty sure "AABB in iambic tetrameter" is the easiest for beginners to write. Keeping track of ABAB is difficult for me, and more than four iambs per line is also quite tough. Didn't really know the terminology that well either. It's fun though, I'd recommend it 
Ooo yes, I'd love to! 
it might take me a while to get it just right, but I promise I'll post it when it's finished 
i love your poem it’s sincere and beautiful, i can feel the feelings you pour as I read it . I used to write and read a poem (I’m busy with my classes that I don’t have much time for it) for me poetry and poems is a beautiful ways to express you feelings and emotions and also a beautiful ways to feel and understand others feelings ,through poems i can feel something that I used to not know before .
thank you for sharing your work and stories , it reminds me of the old days. Some people might think poetry was nothing and just short lines of words but this nothings actually makes my heart beat a sound I’ve never heard before . Keep on writing and if it’s possible I would be happy if you willing to share some with me
Poetry is really fun! I used to be really good at it, but I fell out of practicing, so now my poetry is pretty mediocre 
. I really like the poems y'all have made!
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